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January 9, 2011

Surprise!

Post! So over at One Stop Poetry they have a Sunday challenge photo (55 word poem or flash fiction) and  today I wrote my first poem of twenty-eleven. Thanks to KJ Halliday for the photo. Pop over to One Stop Poetry to have a look at the photo and check to see if I have conveyed it well in words or not.



Accepted

Float on a fire sea
Silver white waters
Where there’s a walking me
Blood red cliffs hover
Hiding what lies

Within it I am discovered
So many strange faces
Erased by the forgotten
Names lost to other spaces

In your eyes you see me flee
My dear human brother
Locked inside your secret places

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11 comments:

dustus said...

Like the way you make the poem feel personal by introducing "Where there’s a walking me." And forgotten names allows for the reader to personalize too. Fine poem, Paige. Thanks for taking the challenge!

Gigi Ann said...

"Float on a fire sea
Silver white waters
Where there's a walking me"

That certainly captured the picture.

repressedsoul said...

It makes me feel as if I've taken a trip with you which is always a goof thing Paige. I enjoyed the read :)

Brian Miller said...

oh those last couple lines put a very personal spin to this nicely done..

Claudia said...

Float on a fire sea
Silver white waters.. this sets the mood for the poem

..and regarding your comment on my post, i agree - we are all..

haiku love songs said...

i love it!

Priyanka Bhowmick said...

Erased by the forgotten.. wonderful imagery n composition..

Snaggle Tooth said...

See, your poem got me very curious about this picture! I'll hafta see it now!

Jannie Funster said...

I couldn't figure out which photo it is over there, but I like your words a lot!

blood red always gets my attention.

xoxo

Jingle Poetry said...

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Deanna Schrayer said...

Paige, you could make a bucket of dishwater look like diamonds in the sea. Absolute gorgeous poem, I love it!